tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post3087407365003803547..comments2024-03-05T11:41:13.533-05:00Comments on Where there had been darkness...: October 23: A Night in the Lonesome October-festJugularjoshhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03768939120752611597noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-23505383930690126352018-01-03T17:59:21.818-05:002018-01-03T17:59:21.818-05:00I love that scene so much. I love that scene so much. Jugularjoshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03768939120752611597noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-43274651420455640522017-12-04T01:31:34.329-05:002017-12-04T01:31:34.329-05:00Jack's rescue of Snuff is another little gem o...Jack's rescue of Snuff is another little gem of writing in this book.vilstefhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14183356136648221026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-39628400401720902482013-10-24T13:21:07.025-04:002013-10-24T13:21:07.025-04:00Quite all right! It would have served me to write ...Quite all right! It would have served me to write that more clearly. I should strive to make sure that the gap between what I mean and what I write is as small as I can make it.Jugularjoshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03768939120752611597noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-62365133991340144532013-10-24T12:33:21.217-04:002013-10-24T12:33:21.217-04:00D'oh . . . you're right, you absolutely *d...D'oh . . . you're right, you absolutely *didn't* specify that you were talking about the chapter as a whole. I'm terrible, and I'm sorry.Zachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07692070094174090593noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-83850515145143043142013-10-24T11:46:30.528-04:002013-10-24T11:46:30.528-04:00I reread what I wrote. I was trying to say that I ...I reread what I wrote. I was trying to say that I thought the quoted segment, from when Jack smashes down the door to the end of the chapter, was perfect, but it looks like my statement could apply to the chapter as a whole.<br /><br />But I agree, both with what you said about how that line reads too much like exposition, and with your proposed amendment.Jugularjoshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03768939120752611597noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504598332261057441.post-26914807999750367192013-10-24T11:31:09.656-04:002013-10-24T11:31:09.656-04:00While I agree that this chapter is excellent (espe...While I agree that this chapter is excellent (especially in the wake of the Dreamlands chapter), I find it funny that you specifically mentioned it as being flawless, because there was a (very small) part I hit while reading that made me think, "Hm, that probably could have been a little better."<br /><br />I'm referring to page 190, when one of the vivisectionists is explaining to the other what they're going to do:<br /><br />"He was very specific that when we render him down, a piece at a time, for candles, there be no foreign blood or other materials mixed in."<br /><br />To me, it's exposition with a bit of a "Your brother, the king" feel to it. If the middle had been cut out so that it read, "He was very specific that when we render him down, there be no foreign blood or other materials mixed in," it wouldn't have set off any alarms for me. Of course, in that case the reader might have been unclear on what was happening, but--well, that's exactly what makes this feel awkward to me: it seems like the vivisectionist is talking for my benefit, not for the other characters'. (And I think any confusion could have been cleared by a side-note from Snuff: "The Vicar apparently wanted me turned into candles, likely for one of his dark rituals.")<br /><br />Anyway, like I said, it's a minor criticism. I just thought it was worth mentioning because A) you specifically called this chapter flawless, and B) this was a flaw (to me) that I specifically came to the blog to comment on.<br /><br />The chapter was still amazing, though. And now you've got me wondering which single one is my favorite--I'll have to think about this, going forward!Zachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07692070094174090593noreply@blogger.com